Hi it's me again and today I'll be showing you the start of a new story I'm writing. It's called crash landing like and comment if you want to see the end
It all started with a trip to the ‘Bahamas’. We were on a holiday for a few weeks because my family had been saving up our money for a couple of years. I was asleep before the crash but the shaking and rattling woke me, my mum was next to Me furiously grabbing at the oxygen mask, and my dad next to her with his mask already on fumbling with the straps of my baby sister ‘Alisha's’ mask. Then I noticed my mask dangling and shaking above my head. I quickly strapped it on and buckled my seat-belt up ‘tight’ as we shot down towards the Earth.
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